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Do not create new items for the infobox. Adhere to the one you can find in Infobox (Wearables). --Haustein (talk) 11:17, 16 October 2015 (CEST) is not a reliable source of information. Yates Buckley may be a dabbling neuroscience fan but he does not appear to have a single paper published under his name.

Do not attribute references to a quote that is not in the reference text. I'm talking about reference no. 7 and the preceding quote. --Haustein (talk) 08:27, 9 November 2015 (CET)

For correctly assessing the potential Risk factor and the amount of information available (Data available) about the device, please see Data Availability and Risk factor.

The infobox has incorrectly written values for the categories. For example, for the operating system category, simply writing iOS is enough. Category sensors is wrong. A LED diode is not a sensor but an indicator. The device is measuring brain waves, that is a form of a sensor. The weight category should contain only the number, remove the "Device:" part. Take a look at other entries to see how to fix your infobox.

Do not use the second person narrative (You control...; You can also...; etc.) while writing about the device. You are not writing a piece of advertisement but a scientifically grounded text. The same applies to expressions such as "A soothing neck massage" or "so that you can enjoy". Be neutral. I am afraid you will have to rewrite most of your text because of that.

When you are converting between two currencies, i.e. "$ 299 (= 7300 CZK)", please include a month and a year when that conversion was done. Currency rates are changing, and what was a correct conversion this year, may not be applicable in the next year.

There are many parts of your entry directly copied from the Thync website. This is not really acceptable. Please write the information in your own words.

Ethical issues, Media impact, Public policy and other sections are empty. If you think there may not be any Ethical issues for example, write that down as well. It's better than to have an empty section.

I'm not sure about using Czech language sources. But this is something we will have to discuss with Ms Žáčková next time. --Haustein (talk) 10:47, 16 November 2015 (CET)

There are still some issues left, Simona. Let's start with the infobox and move on to the text later.

The infobox is missing any references. The thing is designed so it gather hard data such as the date of announcement. These have to be properly cited!

The controls field is completely wrong. If the device is controlled through a smartphone, then writing 'smartphone' in there will suffice. If you wish to do so, you can put the compatible smartphone operating systems in brackets outside the semantic category.

Come to think of it, does the device actually measure something? Or does it just stimulates the brain? In case of the latter, there are no sensors on the device at all.

Are you sure the risk factor is low? I believe the effects of tDCS are well understood to be potentially dangerous. As the literature you references clearly says (Malen 2014, p 10). The second paper you referenced (Johnson 2009) does not deal with these devices applied to the head at all.

Please include a month to the price as well.

There are still parts that are copied from other sources. Ms Žáčková really dislike this, so try to at least re-write the information in your own words. The first paragraph under Health risk is an example of this. It is directly copied from the article you referenced at the end of the paragraph. If you want to quote the article, please do so in the style of your other quotes with proper reference added.

There are many grammatical errors. Unfortunately, the discussion here has no space to list them all. Ask a classmate to help you or come see me to my office here at MOA or during my office hours at FF.

The Main description section lacks any description of the device. What is is made from? How does one put in on the head? What is the battery life. Etc. The very second paragraph of your entry should be move to the Main description section and expanded with more technical information.

The Purpose of the device is to influence the mood, not change it.

Company & People is missing any information about the company.

Every date under the Important dates section should be referenced.

Are you sure there are no ethical issues that could arise from being able to influence the mood?

The first paragraph of Health Risks section is directly copied from the article. Rephrase it or do a proper quotation.

What do you mean by "one people are right-handed, but other left-handed"? What does the hand preference has to do with correct polarity?

The whole Health risks section appears to be hastily written. It also has very poor stylistics and contain many grammatical errors.

Enhancement/Therapy... section has many grammatical errors which makes it difficult to read.

The section Public and Media Impact... Again with the Yates Buckley, he has no background in neuroscience, do not portrait him as a scientific authority. This section also lacks any other media or social networks sources. Surely there are other mentions of Thync beside Quora. I think I mentioned this issue last time we were looking at your entry in the class?

Under the Public policy section, you have yet again directly copied the text from the Thync website.

And you did it again in the Related technologies section when you mentioned professor Tyler.

You mention that tDCS, and TENS for that matter, are researched topics earlier in your entry. Please do mention other research that was no conducted by Thync too.

Include an image that shows the Thync device more closely. Preferably one that shows the electrodes. --Haustein (talk) 11:34, 11 December 2015 (CET)

Dear user, it seems to me that you have some problems with the image in infobox. In order to let Infobox understand, what you mean, wrote only the name of the image. It should function then.

In addition, you do not have to write to the section "commentaries" in the infobox. If the information has a correct form, infobox is able to understand it i.e. it will understand the date "October 2014", if you wrote it without quotation marks, but not with them. Infobox is created for semantic search and if the main field is not filled, it does not express any value in semantic search. --Zuzka (talk) 11:43, 29 September 2016 (CEST)

You have wrongly written the one of the categories. Namely it is not "Electronic and Other devices", but "Electronic and Other Devices". --Zuzka (talk) 11:47, 29 September 2016 (CEST)

Dear user, thank you for your contribution. I have some suggestions for you. Firstly, you do not have to be so precise in the infobox. The simple information as controls: smatrphone, is enough. Secondly, the weight of the device is enough, you can specify the weight of other parts in the text, if you consider it important. Thirdly, if you want to include an image, you have to upload it before this. If you uploaded the image but you do not remember its title, check List of files. The line which is included between 'image_file_name' and 'category' does not function and corrupts the category line. Fourthly, you can find a guide for the line 'Data Availabe' here Data Availability. If you have any question, do not hesitate to ask. --Zuzka (talk) 20:31, 17 October 2016 (CEST)

Dear user, patent's reference is Ok, but use please direct link to the US patent service not the Google one. Thank you. --Zuzka (talk) 08:08, 19 October 2016 (CEST)

Hi Zuzka, reference was corrected. Best regards. Simona--Vallovas (talk) 17:12, 19 October 2016 (CEST)

Dear user, if you want to upload any other image it is possible now. In addition, if you corrected you entry, you might noticed, that it have a tiny blue line above the infobox. It is caused by the residuum of the old infobox. If you delete everything above infobox, it should be OK. Moreover, the categories are still not correct. As I wrote previously, you should replace "Electronic and Other devices" by "Electronic and Other Devices". It would fix the categories. Kindest regards, --Zuzka (talk) 15:50, 20 October 2016 (CEST)

Hi Zuzka, please delete all my images without image credit. I looked for it but I didn't find it. After that I upload the images with image credit once more. Thanks a lot. --Vallovas (talk) 10:17, 8 November 2016 (CET)

Dear user, all your images have been deleted. Best regards,--Zuzka (talk) 07:42, 9 November 2016 (CET)