2,414
edits
Changes
Jump to navigation
Jump to search
commentary
For general help about formatting your contribution, be it links, embedding images, references or other elements, please see the [[Getting started on HCE wiki]] guide.
First of all, please pay attention to closing the HTML tags properly. The trailing <nowiki></tr></nowiki> tag in the beginning of the page is there because you forgot to close it somewhere in the infobox. <nowiki><tr></nowiki> is a pair tag and it always needs to be closed to function properly. Speaking about the infobox, do NOT create your own items (CPU, battery, display...), simply fill in the categories provided with the infobox template. The information you have added it is indeed relevant, but it has no place in the strictly formatted infobox. Move it to the main body of the article.
The remaining required elements have to have a proper reference attached to them. For example, if you know that the device weights x grams, you have to provide the evidence in the form of a proper reference attached to it. This applies to all other items in the infobox.
Do not create new sections, i.e. Display and design. Stick to the provided template.
The information under the section Purpose does not belong into this section. Please follow the guidelines (information between the <nowiki><!-- --></nowiki> tags) provided with the template.
As for the remaining sections, '''do not forget to add references''', especially to dates and hard data you mention! The media section is awfully short, please expand it with more information.
The reference number 3 is empty and needs fixing.
--[[User:Haustein|Haustein]] ([[User talk:Haustein|talk]]) 15:55, 12 November 2015 (CET)
----
There are no categories attached to the entry.
The infobox category is incorrect. It should reflect the lowest level category the entry is in.
Add more references to the infobox.
Add a date to the price that shows when you wrote the price down.
The two values for Controls are incorrectly joined into one.
Refrain from using review like language such as "There is no need to charged" or "Big advantage for the buyers is". Use neural, factual style of writing. Remember, you are writing an academic text, not a tech review.
Do not you second person narrative "you" because of the reasons stated above.
Company and People section is missing.
Important Dates needs more references added. Preferably add a reference to each of the date.
Under Health Risks, you wrote "no proven risks were confirmed with those wearables". But what wearables? What risks? Expand on this a bit more, please.
State clearly, whether Moto 360 is enhancement or therapy or treatment.
Public and Media presentation should be expanded with information from reviews and such. How is the device actually portrayed in the media. How was is accepted among the users. Search blogs, discussions and so on.
The second paragraph under Public Policy could be better. Especially the reference.
Related technologies section is empty.--[[User:Haustein|Haustein]] ([[User talk:Haustein|talk]]) 20:29, 12 December 2015 (CET)
----
